Changes in the break

Recently, a proposal has been made by the Minister of education that the school's coming years will not begin at the beginning of September as usual, but in the middle of August. Moreover, there will be a two-week break between the semesters. I strongly disagree with the Minister's new proposal and I beleive that it will be a big mistake to insert this law to the system.

Personally, I think that the summer break between the school years is significantly important for the students, after their serious efforts during the year. Many students say that this break is the ideal opportunity for them (to) "lie down"(ww.) for a second(ww.-while) and carefully prepare for the next year.

Furthermore, There are(gr.) definitely no more appropiate time for the students to work and earn some money. It is widely known that the teenagers today are more likely to go out in weekends with freinds. Therefore, as a result of avoiding bothering the parents, the summer break gives them plenty (of) time to take care of their savings for the following year.

It is clear that this new proposal has no place in the education system. Besides, the Minister of Education has to deal with a lot of unsolved problems which require a(מיותר) more attention than the break(like what?).

Good work!

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Daphna

characteristics to succeed

Most successful people in the world have succeeded due to some necessary characteristics. The reason for their success and compared to unsuccessful people, is the proper use of their extraordinary characteristics. There is variety of good characteristics, among them there are the(מיותר) creativity and responsibility.

The people's creativity is significantly important. With this characteristic and with some imagination, people can reach to(מיותר) some revolutionary decisions and ideas that other didn't think(gr.-use the present perfect) about them(מיותר) before. With creativity there is no limit to the(מיותר) reality, that makes people always think one step ahead and search for something new.

In addition, the(מיותר) responsibility is as great as the creativity. This helpful characteristic contributes to the arrangement(ww.). Deeply Following every step and knowing where and what about everything(phr.) can avoid(ww.-prevent) confusion and losses(what do you mean?), and thus can save a lot of valuable time. This is a proper and comfortable way to the(מיותר) success.

This paragraph does not make any sense. It is not clear what you mean.

To sum up, there are many different ways to success(ww.-succeed), whether by using these characteristics or not. But in my opinion, (a) great part of the successful people owe their success to their characteristics.

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Driving license

An organization of accident victims believes that young drivers are involved in a lot of accidents due to their age and has recently proposed that the age for getting a driver's license should be raised to 19. Perhaps there is a reasonable explanation behind such claims, but I am convinced that this is not the proper solution. - very good opening!

First, around the age of 17, most teenagers have much more free time than later, as a result of the army. As we all know, at the age of 18, the teenagers should join the army
and serve there for 2-3 years on average. During this period of time it would be very exhausting to get the driver's license. Moreover, it is known that teenagers tend to go out and spend time with their friends, therefore, it would be nicer if the child is independent and does not bother his parents frequently about the ride.

In addition, by using caution and concentration while driving, the way of thinking develops(phr.) and improves, which is very important and vital for the teenager's future.
I believe that the best way to deter the young drivers is by exposing them visually to the outcomes of some fatal accidents and make them reconsider their way of driving.

I am quite sure that the ideal age to get a driver's license is 17 and there is no need to limit the driver's license age to 19. I hope that my solution will reduce the car accidents among the teenagers and the teenagers themselves will gain the respect and the esteem about driving from the adults.

Excellent.

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Daphna

Community Involvement

09/15/2011
Community Involvement

Have you ever wondered how you can take advantage of your free time? Well, there's no need to. Here are some suggestions to devote your time for the community – and to feel good about your self.

Firstly, rather than assisting old people to cross the street, you can help the poor and the needy by volunteering for a company that is engaged in that. Helping to collect donations is much better. There are people of all ages who volunteer for such companies and this way you can find other friends too.

Secondly, knowing your surrounding's situation is really important. Don't you want to voice your opinion and your wishes? People have been attempting to do so for years. With your involvement in demonstrations, you can absolutely change something that does not satisfy you and make it better for you.

Devoting your time to the community can be difficult and tiring, but if you can make someone happier, undoubtedly you will feel it as well. It all depends on you.

Much better. Very good work.

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Avi Morduhayev

A Letter of Complaint

.............................. 43 Bamba Street
.............................. Israel
.............................. May 2, 2011

Mr. James Fedriko
Director(ww. - store manager)
Nike Shoes Shop
106 Golda Street
(city?)

Dear Mr. Fedriko,

I am writing because I with to complain about the shoes prices that have (been) raised over the last few months.

First of all, I have been buying from you frequently when you were the cheapest and the most worthwhile shop in the area. But, now, I am not sure I or anyone(ww.) else will continue

buy(ing) from you when the prices (have) raised significantly.

In addition, now, after you raised the prices, I discovered that there is another shop in the area with the same products, but it offers prices which are lower than yours. Therefore, your promise "The cheapest shop" is not valid anymore.

In conclusion, I am very disappointed about the last change. I and everybody(ww.) in our area will appreciate(it) if you will(מיותר) return the old prices and we will continue enjoy(ing) your excellent services.

I look forward to your reply.

Very truly yours,
Rocky Kory.

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Good work.

Daphna

Opinion Letter

-------------------------------17 Vintage St.
-------------------------------Israel
-------------------------------February 7, 2011

Ms. Gilat Simon
Principal
Kugel High School
Holon
Mote Gur 18 St. (these two have to change places - first the street and then the city)
.
Dear Ms. Simon,

.
Concerning the decision to cancel all our school trips, I would like to express my opinion on that important decision. Following the alcohol (drinking) and smoking in our school, I strongly agree with you and think that this is the right way to improve the behavior.

For a start, the last long journey we have made(ww.+gr. - use the past) was greatly shameful. We have(מיותר) left behind mess and chaos in place of the tidy rooms and the neat corridors that we got on the first day. These events have probably left a bad impression on the hostel owner.

As for the teachers and the hostel workers, I believe the the students' behavior should not be their bother(ww.) and mature students have to be aware of those around them and respect them.

I congratulate you on your decision. I only wish it will influence them for the better so that you can take them to the outside world(phr.).

Yours truly,

James Lork

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Formal Letter to Request Information

------------------------------------------------------------------------7 Stonerock Road
------------------------------------------------------------------------Wonderland
------------------------------------------------------------------------February 6, 2011

Mr. Steve Avila
Paradise Hotel Head Offices
2240 Correa Road
Waikiki, Hawaii 96822

Dear Mr. Avila,

I saw your advertisement on the website and I wish to know further information about the sports photography job you offer.

Your advertisement mentions the being able to take pictures(phr.) of your guests doing water sports. I am not a professional photographer, however, I know the basics of photography, therefore, I wonder if you could tell me how much experience is needed in photography.

In addition, could you give some specific information about the working hours and the salary? Moreover, I really enjoy swimming, so I would be grateful if you could give(ww.) some free time to swim after working hours.

I look forward to your reply.

Sincerely yours,

Rocky Ckory

Good Work.

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Daphna