Changes in the break

Recently, a proposal has been made by the Minister of education that the school's coming years will not begin at the beginning of September as usual, but in the middle of August. Moreover, there will be a two-week break between the semesters. I strongly disagree with the Minister's new proposal and I beleive that it will be a big mistake to insert this law to the system.

Personally, I think that the summer break between the school years is significantly important for the students, after their serious efforts during the year. Many students say that this break is the ideal opportunity for them (to) "lie down"(ww.) for a second(ww.-while) and carefully prepare for the next year.

Furthermore, There are(gr.) definitely no more appropiate time for the students to work and earn some money. It is widely known that the teenagers today are more likely to go out in weekends with freinds. Therefore, as a result of avoiding bothering the parents, the summer break gives them plenty (of) time to take care of their savings for the following year.

It is clear that this new proposal has no place in the education system. Besides, the Minister of Education has to deal with a lot of unsolved problems which require a(מיותר) more attention than the break(like what?).

Good work!

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Daphna

characteristics to succeed

Most successful people in the world have succeeded due to some necessary characteristics. The reason for their success and compared to unsuccessful people, is the proper use of their extraordinary characteristics. There is variety of good characteristics, among them there are the(מיותר) creativity and responsibility.

The people's creativity is significantly important. With this characteristic and with some imagination, people can reach to(מיותר) some revolutionary decisions and ideas that other didn't think(gr.-use the present perfect) about them(מיותר) before. With creativity there is no limit to the(מיותר) reality, that makes people always think one step ahead and search for something new.

In addition, the(מיותר) responsibility is as great as the creativity. This helpful characteristic contributes to the arrangement(ww.). Deeply Following every step and knowing where and what about everything(phr.) can avoid(ww.-prevent) confusion and losses(what do you mean?), and thus can save a lot of valuable time. This is a proper and comfortable way to the(מיותר) success.

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To sum up, there are many different ways to success(ww.-succeed), whether by using these characteristics or not. But in my opinion, (a) great part of the successful people owe their success to their characteristics.

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Daphna

Driving license

An organization of accident victims believes that young drivers are involved in a lot of accidents due to their age and has recently proposed that the age for getting a driver's license should be raised to 19. Perhaps there is a reasonable explanation behind such claims, but I am convinced that this is not the proper solution. - very good opening!

First, around the age of 17, most teenagers have much more free time than later, as a result of the army. As we all know, at the age of 18, the teenagers should join the army
and serve there for 2-3 years on average. During this period of time it would be very exhausting to get the driver's license. Moreover, it is known that teenagers tend to go out and spend time with their friends, therefore, it would be nicer if the child is independent and does not bother his parents frequently about the ride.

In addition, by using caution and concentration while driving, the way of thinking develops(phr.) and improves, which is very important and vital for the teenager's future.
I believe that the best way to deter the young drivers is by exposing them visually to the outcomes of some fatal accidents and make them reconsider their way of driving.

I am quite sure that the ideal age to get a driver's license is 17 and there is no need to limit the driver's license age to 19. I hope that my solution will reduce the car accidents among the teenagers and the teenagers themselves will gain the respect and the esteem about driving from the adults.

Excellent.

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Daphna