Computers

Recently many people use the passive by different kinds of technology(phr. - not clear what you mean), some of them complex and some of them simpler. The technology has changed our lives thoroughly. educators have been using computers and other information technologies as tools to increase student learning in many countries around the world.

Nowdays, some people suppose that the technology and the computers will take over the education and the future of the teachers and I totally agree with this idea. One of the most important advantages of this assumption is the economy, using computers in classrooms will decrease the number of teachers in school.

Another advantage is the "living standard" of the robots. As we all know, compared to teachers, with proper use, computers can work all the time without a break. Today, when a teacher gets sick, it requires to search for a suitable subtitute teacher, but computers will never be sick.

Technology is developing and improving all the time these days and I believe it will facilitate our lives. It will make our future a better and easier future.

This is much better. Well done.

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Daphna.

The responsiblty of our food

We have read the article about "The Disaster Between our Ears", that presents the
influence of our nutrition on our behavior. Studies and experiments have proven that when we eat healthy food and avoid fried food and different types of fast food our behavior changes.

The nutritionist Alice Brown claims that the manufacturers should be more responsible of the food they produce, but I only agree with her partially. In my opinion, the manufacturers don't bother to reveal all the components of the product they manufacture and that causes different problems for many people, like physical and verbal abuse, and aggressive behavior.

Besides, there is no doubt, that the consumers should carefully check the products they consume. For the last decade, the level of obesity related diseases has increased a lot and the people have to be sure they are safe from these diseases.

therefore, it is necessary to be aware of the products the people purchase.

In conclusion, I believe that people should be more circumspect and they also need to cope with the temptations of the fast food. That way we can prevent diseases among people.

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Daphna

Israeli wanted arrested at airport

An israeli citizen, Yevgeny Prechikov, was arrested in Ben Gurion airport for murder. Yevgeny Prechikov has been wanted in the United States for many years and arrested recently because he had murdered two women in the United States and fled to Israel.

Yevgeny Prechikov helped two Russian women, ages 47 and 51, with their insurance companies. When the cost for the life insurance was a million dollars, he murdered them and collected all of their money from the insurance.
The United States has been looking after him for six years, but no one knew that he fled from the United States to Israel. Now he failed and was arrested at Ben Gurion Airport.Soon he will be sent to the United States for trail.

To sum up, I think it's horrible what people can do for money and although he worked in one of the most important jobs, he acted like someone who without conscience.

http://www.ynetnews.com/articles/0,7340,L-3971747,00.html - The source.

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Daphna

Favorite Place

During the summer vacation My family and I have been to (the) Safary, a very astonishing and attractive place, surrounded by many trees and located in the heart of Ramat Gan.
We saw many different species of animals, some of them were very unique and rare, like the penguin and the kangaroo.

The word "Safari" comes from the African Swahili language, and like (in) Africa, the animals in the Safari move freely and behave naturally right in front of the visitors' eyes. Moreover, We could see how the animals ate their special food.

If the weather is too hot, or you are just tired, when you enter the Safari, you can always rent a special car which can help you explore the area. In addition, the Safari serves as home to endangered animals like the tiger and cheetah(How is this last sentence connected to the rest of this paragraph?).

in conclusion, The safari is suitable for people who take an interest in nature. We have decided to take advantage of this vacation and learn something new about the animal kingdom beyond what we already know.

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Daphna

Burge McCall

The story is about a special married couple, Burge McCall and his wife. First of all, I really should start the essay with the description of the main character, Burge McCall. Burge McCall had a job as a clerk in the District Court. He was a short, heavy-set man with a bad personality and a very bad attitude. Unlike Burge, his wife, Mrs. McCall, was a thin and tall lady with long black hair and big eyes. She was much more polite and calm than her husband.

At the begining of the story we could understand the relationship between the couple. Burge had a good job as a clerk in the District Court and made a good salary and despite all his

success, his attitude toward his wife was terrible. They both almost didn't talk to each other. She didn't answer him even after he had called her names. Burge used verbal and physical violence against his wife. One day, he really exaggerated and slapped his wife.

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As a result of his slap , she got mad and called him "a Big rat". Soon afterward, after Burge heard from the drugstore that his wife had bought some rat poison, he became anxious. He improved his attittude toward her, hope she will forgive him. He didn't know that his wife had dominated everything.

To sum up, I enjoyed reading this story. The story was very surprising and I didn't expect it to end like this. I am glad that their relationship improved. I strongly recommend everyone to read and enjoy. There are many funny incidents that you should not miss.

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Daphna

16 Isreal Galili.

Holon

May 5th, 2010

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CBS News
45 Ahad Haam st,
Holon

Dear Editor,

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I have read the artical(sp.) "The Case Against Homework" that was published by "Ben Berrafato(ww.)" and refers to the children's homework (The article in CBS News was not written by Ben, it was about Ben and his point of view on homework). I strongly disagree with him because I think that's not enough to learn at school.

In the articals(sp.), the boy says that teachers give us homework without our permission, and in his opinion this (verb?) slavery. I was not(gr. - would not be) surprised if he fail(ed) his test and school. It seems to me that he did not know the meaning of the homework and how that really helps.

Throughout the period of my studies I learned that even though it is so hard to study and do homework, the test will be easier(if....). There is a well-known proverb -"Hard in training - easy in battle" that fits exactly to this situation.

(explain this argument further)


In conclusion, students don't realize how important homework (is) and I hope they will pay attention better to that in the future

Your letter is incomplete.

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Daphna

Letter of complaint

16 Israel Galili St,
Holon
April 28th, 2010.


"Blockbuster"
45 Ahad Haam st,
Holon


Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to complain about the CDs that I purchased from your store last night. Unfortunately, they were not working properly so now I'd like to solve this problem.


It was 21:00 PM, when my friends and I decided to watch some movies.
We all know that the best choice to buy or rent movies is, of course, from the Blockbuster. I rented the movie but when we got home, we were surprised to discover that three out of four movies we ordered did not work properly.

The first disc was supposed to include video clips with sound, but we are(gr. - were) very disappointed to find out that the sound was not working , while the video was working. In the remaining two discs, the exact opposite happened, the sound worked but we did not see anything.


If I buy CDs from the market and it does not work, I understand and I don't complain. But if I buy CDs from one of the most famous shops in the world, I expect to receive good-quality discs that works(gr.) properly. So, maybe you could give me a refund or just give another disc.(phr. - Therefore, I would appreciate a full refund or alternative discs).

I look forward to your response.


Sincerely yours,

Avi Mordehayev.

This is better. Good work.

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Daphna

Review - HaPijamot

I have chosen to talk about my favorite TV program, which is "HaPijamot". This program is broadcast from Sunday to Thursday, except Fridays and Saturdays between 14/00-14/30. It is one of the most famous sitcoms on Israeli television.

The show follows the misadventure of three friends: Ilan, Kobi and Oded, when they move from Netanya to Tel-Aviv, in order to lunch(sp.) their band. They all live on the "Maze Pinat Mapo" street (on the) 4th floor. Unlike many shows, the characters in the show(verb?) aware that they are on television.

Gery often complains about his wife. This show always ends with Shtifat Kelim which shows the characters washing the dishes for Gery and summarizd the chapter. (not clear)
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I recommend this program to everyone, because it is funny, and furthermore the program contains educating content to children.(Explain. this is not enough as a conlusion)

You posted this review 2 days ago. You claimed I haven't checked it, but there was a reason for that, you were very-very late....

Next time you are that late with your work, I will not check it .

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Daphna

Description - My Phone.

My favorite possession is my cellPhone. I have had this product for 2 years.

I like it because it entertains me while I am bored.

It's color is blue, (it is) shaped like a square, small and does not make noise. It can be carried to school, work, trips and even to the park. The cellphone is made of iron and plastic, and it has a variety of functions, such as listening to music(phr. - a music player) , playing(מיותר) (various) games and also watching(מיותר) movies.

I like my cellphone so much, because I got it after a long argument with my parents. When I asked my father to buy me an advanced cellphone with many functions, he told me it isn't(gr.) neccessary because the purpose of the cellphone is(gr.) to communicate with people and not for games. Now, my birthday came(gr. - has come) and my dad agreed to buy me the cellphone.

I've chosen this Phone because it is used replaced(gr. - to replace) the mp3 players, diaries , (a) calculator and more(ww. - other important) functions. It can help you anywhere you want and also in case of emergency.

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Daphna

Generation Gap Task 7

The teenagers today have too much freedom and less responsibility compared to the past. In the past, teenagers had always been given more chores and actually acted more like adults and did what adults did, so they can't complain that today more difficult for them(phr.).

The young people don't even know how much freedom they have. The teenagers today want to be more responsible and they feel mature. For the first time in their lives, they have many difficult choices and decisions to make. If they choose the wrong choices, the next time they will be more experienced and choose the better choice. In addition it's (a) great preparation for the hard life out there.

Especially(ww. - You can't start a sentence with this word.) when the teenagers want to go out with their friends, or go to a party and their parents disagree, they get angry and don't understand that everything their parents say is for their own good. - how is this part connected to the first part of this paragraph. It's as if you are saying 2 different things at once.

Another situation is in school, when there is an important test. The children prefer not to study very seriously because they know, there will be another chance to be tested, that's why they fail and don't succeed in school. They must realize that in real life there are not many chances like today in their school, because of this the responsibility is more important(phr, - what exactly do you mean? Explain that teens should be taught to be reponsible and study properly for tests).

In conclusion, the teenagers should be taught by their parents that they are not so busy(phr. - what do you mean?) and show them the great freedom they have compared to their commitment and prepare them for the real life.

Better, but there is still work to do.

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Daphna